高考英語滿分作文點評與評析

我們從高考英語的滿分作文中返回到點評，看它們的出色之處，學習借鑑它們的優點。下面是本站小編給大家整理的高考英語滿分作文點評，供大家參閱!

　　重慶高考英語滿分作文點評

【試題回放】

據報道，7歲的美國女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)後處於極度的痛苦之中，美國抗癌協會(ACS)決定，每當Amy收到一封慰問信，就給她增加3美分的治療款。

假如你是新華中學的學生李華，請你用英文給Amy寫一封慰問信，主要內容包括：

自我介紹

得知的情況

表示鼓勵

打算爲她做什麼

祝她早日康復

注意：

1. 信的格式已爲你寫好

2. 信中不得出現你的真實情況。

3. 詞數100左右。

4. 請在答題卡上作答。

Dear Amy,

I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

[名師點評]

本文依照要求，涵蓋了所有要點。文章使用了高中常見的句式，如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比較好。作者對定語從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章，行文自然而通順，值得學習。

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好詞ize v.意識到ise v.允諾te v.捐贈

好句1、I?m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.

我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌，給你帶來了巨大的痛苦。

好處：which引導限制性定語從句。

2、So, stand up and fight against the disease!

因此，堅強地與疾病做鬥爭吧!

好處：擲地有聲，語言準確。

　　高考英語滿分作文點評

作文題目

假設你是李華，你的英國筆友Bob將於九月到你所在城市的建新華文學校學中文，來信請你在學校附近爲他找一套住房。請根據圖畫提供的信息，寫信介紹住房的情況，並告知住房面積爲25平方米，月租500元。

注意：1、詞數：100左右;2、參考詞彙：房租—Tent(n.).

作品一：

I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.

Hope you will come here soon!

All the best!

Yours,

Li Hua

滿分理由

本文格式正確，意思表述完整，行文流暢自然。作者在寫作過程中注意長短句並用，還使用了以‘which，’引導的非限定性定語從句，從而使文章層次分明，富於變化，不愧爲考場佳作。

作品二：

Dear Bob,

Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.

I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.

Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport,see you.

Best wishes !

Yours,

Li Hua

滿分理由

本文格式正確，內容完整，表述清楚，銜接緊密流暢，時態語態使用準確，特別是結尾末段適度的發揮，既充實了內容，又符合邏輯，成爲本文與衆不同的亮點。

　　湖北高考英語滿分作文點評

【試題回放】假設你是卜曼宜，你購買了一部某外國公司生產的手機，因有質量問題，要求該公司更換。請根據下列要點，用英文寫一封電子郵件。

要點：1. 問題：手機不響鈴，不能發短信;該產品已售完，無法更換;型號新，無配件，無法維修。2. 要求：公司應儘快予以更換。

注意：1. 詞數爲100左右;

2. 參考詞彙：配件—— spare part;

3. 電子郵件的開頭和結尾已爲你寫好(不計入你所寫詞數);

4.已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結尾不得抄入答題卡。

Dear Sir，

I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely yours,

Bu Manyi

【名師點評】

本文內容要點齊全，語言豐富，結構合理，如頭兩句說明了購買手機後發現故障的情況，中間部分說明了無法維修而必須讓公司更換手機的原委，最後明確提出自己的要求，明白流暢，將題目所提出的要點全部表達清楚，較好的完成了任務。全文以一般過去時爲基調，結合主動語態與被動語態，並使用了so, but, therefore 等連接詞，使文章結構完整嚴密。固定短語，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的語言顯得地道而精煉。

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好詞1. disappointment n.失望 erate adj.絕望的 3. consideration n.體諒

好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

令我失望的是，他說因爲在中國是新款手機，所以沒有配件來修理。

評析：複雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語。

　　江蘇高考英語滿分作文點評

【試題回放】實現有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關係，不僅要善於言表，更要學會傾聽。請你根據下表中所提供的信息，寫一篇題爲“Being a Good Listener” 的英文演講稿。

爲何傾聽表示尊重，增進理解，建立良好的人際關係

誰來傾聽家長傾聽孩子理解孩子，消除代溝，……

老師傾聽學生了解學生，滿足需求，……

同學相互傾聽增進友誼，互幫互學，……

怎樣傾聽(請考生聯繫自己擬定內容，列舉兩至三點。)

注意：

1、 對所給要點，逐一陳述，適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。

2、 詞數150左右。開頭和結尾已經寫好，不計入總詞數。

3、 演講稿中不得提及考生所在學校及本人姓名。

Good afternoon, everyone.

The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

Thank you for your listening!

【名師點評】

這是一篇感情真摯、熱情洋溢的演講稿，文中大量運用排比句型，不但準確流暢地表達出題目中所提供的信息，而且體現出作者熟練運用英語的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同結構的複合句式，將傾聽的對象及其作用闡述得淋漓盡致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句議論應如何傾聽，則更進一步地增強了這篇演說稿的說服力。

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好詞ote v .促進 2. interpersonal adj.人際的

3. generation gap. 代溝 4. open-minded adj. 虛心的

好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

同學之間應該互相傾聽，這樣他們可以互相學習和幫助，也會形成友誼。

評析：複雜句的組合，被動句的使用。

2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

我想強調的是我們每個人都應該更多的傾聽他人。

評析：複合句的使用。

　　北京高考英語滿分作文點評

【試題回放】假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，爲校刊英語園地寫一篇題爲“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，敘述上週你們班從準備春遊到春遊結束的完整過程。

注意： 詞數不少於60.

提示詞： 遊樂園amusement park 垃圾箱bin

Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

We were tired but happy.

【名師點評】

本情景作文的內容要點如下：1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。內容要點可用不同方式表達。本文覆蓋了所有內容要點，較好地完成了試題規定的任務。其中，寫作主題突出，詳略得當，應用了較多的語法結構和詞彙，而且有效的使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文機構緊湊。本文敘述清楚，描寫細緻，準確運用了很多富有表現力的詞和句型，例如：“set off early”，“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等，將活動的情形很形象地描述了出來。

積累卡片英漢互譯

好詞1 set off 出發2. litter n.廢棄物ectively adv.分別地

好句e climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

在爬山時，我們享受着溫暖的陽光和美麗的風景。

1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

然而，當我們登上山頂，被眼前的一幕驚呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。

評析：細節描寫，生動形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動傳神。